No one likes a hurricane – but me
This one was impressive, stronger.
She passed! Can't tell where things sitting!
Then again I tidy make things cleaner.
Planning, fighting are no longer,
No one knows when she'll be hitting.
She's life threatening! Now I'm living keener.
My enemy,Pure energy, could I've been wronger?
Whirlwind's eye, I'm sitting knitting,
Alice Dora, hurry - Miss Demeanor!
She got powerful and stronger,
All my clouds they are no longer!
Jan H. Hellberg (15.11.2024)
Alice is and will be a recurring theme on this blog, see this post Slumber party with Alice. I think that’s why I loved the stories of Alice in Wonderland and Through the Looking Glass so much. I probably always felt a bit like her. Wow, this world is full of wonders. Yes, some are scary, but even that sometimes helps, in managed doses, to get my brain going.
I sometimes explain the condition of ADHD with that very image of a hurricane.
Like many others I can often even „hyperfocus“, and do one task and work for hours even without noticing. Today and tonight I did a weeks work and solved issues I thought would take me ages. This is also called flow, but I feel for ADHD, hyperfocus is a better label.
However, I’m sitting in the eye of a hurricane, when I look up everything is flying around (in my thoughts), my wife, my kids, my family, my friends, our house, the works that need to be done, the tidying up that never seems to finish, the paper work, the work for my job of course, my many extra tasks, that I need by the way for my brain to function (that one is a catch 22). And when I think I managed to focus on one item, it often quickly gets out of sight again. To the extend that I often can’t remember important things I just realised I still need to take care of. Hence a paper notebook and lists have become my best friends. Only need to remember looking in or at them from time to time. 😉
There seems to be often no middle way, either one thing and I can’t even stop doing it to eat, drink etc., or the whirlwind.
Feel free to react to both the poem and also own experiences with hyperfocus etc.
This was written for Laura’s MTB prompt: A Trillonet of Wild Winds. Wild winds are our topic and the given poetry style is 14 lines, with 4 tercets and a couplet, ABC rhymed and AA, BB or CC. I used a iambic tetrameter, but broke with it in the third verses.
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This is charming and wonderful… 🙂👍🏼✌🏼🫶🏼🎼
I like the Alice theme, I remember another poet who always came back to alice…
ps I think you need another tercet to fullfill the requirement of the prompt.
Thanks, Björn.
You’re right. I’ll come back to our and fix it.
The hurricane seems a perfect metaphor for ADHD as I understand it…
Thank you, yes I found that quite some others can relate.
I love Alice, there is something comforting in those tales I feel… I sometimes get the feeling my mind is in disarray but I could imagine it would be like a hurricane with ADHD
Well, as everyone has a bit different experience it might not fit for all, however for me it’s a good metaphor and helps talking about challenges and traits rather than some diagnosis …
My first born son is ‚hyperfocused‘ … in many ways it has served him well. Now age 64 he has grown into it. I love your poem and thank you for gifting it.
Thank you, that is indeed a gift when we are able to make the best of our traits and often even do great things with them (and for me now it often feels not despite it).
Sharply and shriekingly captured, this whirling mental state. Alice’s emergence from the speaker is like Mr Hyde tearing loose from Dr. Jekyl. And that correction in the middle is the distinction or awareness that says all — My enemy / Pure energy.
Thank you, Brenda!
Happy you like it.